It’s the 13th, and it’s WIPpet Wednesday. To me, I want to treat this as if it was the creepy Friday the 13th in the WIPpet world. Sooooo…. I’m cutting right to the chase! I’m giving you a creepy excerpt. If you are squeamish, I give you warning. For WIPpet math, 1+3=4, so I’m giving 4 paragraphs and a bonus line, because really, the last two ‘paragraphs’ are one liners of dialogue.
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Kelsey gave the punching bag one last solid blow, placing a large dent into the cracked, red leather. She grinned. Man, she was good! Using her forearm to wipe off the beads of sweat along her brow, Kelsey set about removing the boxing gloves from her hands, but something caught her eye. Looking up, the cracks in the leather bag had bloomed and flowered, and from them trickled red streams of what looked like blood.
Horrified, Kelsey stood there and watched the stream turn into torrents, the leather cracks widening until they splintered open. From within the bag’s depths fell Zeke, his battered Blue Defender uniform drenched in blood. Kelsey screamed while reaching out to catch him, but with her hands still encased in the gloves, all that resulted was Zeke falling on top of her, the both of them tumbling down onto the Outpost’s floor.
While blood continued to pour out around them, Kelsey scrambled to push Zeke’s damaged body off her, but the gloves on her hands prevented any reasonable progress. She lifted an arm to her mouth so she could bite into the glove and release her hand, but instead red liquid filled her mouth. Zeke’s blood. She let out a loud shriek and called to the others for help, but the only one to appear was the Dark Defender. He was a mere five feet away, laughing maliciously and drawing nearer, his scythe blade drawn—
“Kelsey! Wake up!”
“Aaahh!” Kelsey yelled, flailing her arms wildly.
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Teehehehe, there you go 🙂 Hope that was some good suspense for ya.
Sorry I missed last week, but in retrospect, it was good that I did. The week became more busy and I wouldn’t have gotten around to reading any of the other WIPpets, which was something that happened the previous week, too. I’m sorry! 😦
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Sirena said:
Ooh. What a nightmare! I would be screaming too if that’s what I was dreaming about.
booksbysmiles said:
Sweeney Todd was my inspiration ;-P
Xina Marie Uhl said:
Whoa, what a COOL scene! Love your imagination, even if it is a little gory. I can handle gore in fiction but in real life it’s a little different. Nice work!
booksbysmiles said:
Thank you! Major gore I can’t handle in movies. I could watch a surgery, though, and be fine. Throw up is the worst. I can NOT watch that in any form.
Amy said:
Ohhhh. *shivers* Yeah, that would be a horrible nightmare. I’m very squeamish about violence. I’ve never been great with body fluids, which is why I eventually gave up being a nurse, but it’s a billion times worse when the body fluids are from injury.
Adrian said:
awww I kind wish you hadn’t told me it was a dream! =P
booksbysmiles said:
Lol, illusion goes ‘pop!’ ;-P
shanjeniah said:
Ummm…ewwww…I’m honestly more bothered with the idea that she was hitting this guy for who knows how long. Yikes!
I love that it was a dream….although you might want to consider using ‘flail’ and ‘wildly’ in the same sentence. ‘Flails’ implies wildness, already.
booksbysmiles said:
Oh! I hadn’t realized that with no context, it would come across that way. hmm… to me, dreams can be pretty disjointed, and one sequence isn’t logically tied to the other. I took a normal situation and put a grotesque spin on it for character building reasons.
Thanks for pointing that out 🙂
shanjeniah said:
My dream sequences are pretty disjointed, too. I especially enjoy writing fever-dreams!
I’m sure it would be obvious if I’d been reading the whole story. Probably no reason to change a thing. Snippets can just be like that, and my mind moves in mysterious ways!
kathils said:
Eeeeeew! That is gruesome. What a dream. *shudder* Whatever did she eat before she went to bed?
Jenna Wood said:
I am so glad that ended up being a dream! This definitely had me on the edge and makes me want to know why she is having such a horrific nightmare.
Eden said:
Hmm, I’m a bit unsure as to whether I would have preferred no knowing if it was a dream. I do think I wish the Dark Defender wasn’t laughing… hate the whole “evil laugh” thing unless it’s done really well and that’s more of a “unless a certain actor does it very well'” (no, not a certain actor, just any actor who can pull it off… very context driven… have I confused you yet?)
So just how long was she punching that bag in her dream, I wonder….